The final scene of Twinmaker took a lot of work. Here’s the first draft. (v1) “Things will work again now, but probably not the way you’re used to.” So many layers. So many meanings. Q had moved on from quotes, alliteration and [puns]. grown up. Clair stayed right where she was. Finally, the alarm died. […]
(So . . . in early drafts the issue of Clair being invaded by Mallory was played a lot harder. Here, in the train, is where Clair first confronts that fear.) The dream was hard-edged and sharp, like a machete. She tried to worm free of it several times, but once it had her pinned […]
(This takes place on the train to New York, a sequence that was much long in early drafts, to the detriment of the story. I’ve always liked this conversation, though. Q’s bad jokes were a source of fun for me. Also: there were a bunch of extras in this scene that we ended up leaving […]
(Clair and Jesse are chasing the dupe Clair didn’t shoot in the last deleted scene. They’re heading to a rendezvous that was deleted in later drafts.) “He’s turning.” She couldn’t see the actual bike in the darkness ahead and she couldn’t hear it over the shrieking of the motors beneath her, but the red dot […]